Rough cut presentation

http://www.youtube.com/watch?v=uM65wffwbhI

Feed back:

1) For this to be my final cut I will need to include sound

I want to include both ambience sound and non-diagetic music, this means that I need to start researching and looking for sound for this sequence.

2) This cut is still far too long to be an advert and needs to be trimmed a lot more